Re: Coaj Coordination Thread

by **Dray The Fingerless** Sat Apr 17, 2010 9:02 am

eh, minor setback guys, computer problems, might take a day or two....

by **Aardvark** Sun Apr 18, 2010 6:49 am

Getting slower and slower with this, but that's because I can't inspire myself to write anything for it. Might want to take a hiatus once we finish CoaJ.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Sun Apr 18, 2010 11:04 am

why of course.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Sat Apr 24, 2010 7:32 pm

posted a segment.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Sat Apr 24, 2010 7:40 pm

PS: the dialogue is rushed. i hate it. but i can tolerate it. kinda busy life these weeks.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Sun Apr 25, 2010 11:52 pm

wil be writting the fight now. prolly tomorrow. you can...you know...tell me how to improve the dialogue....you know...i already said it was shitty so.....any improvement is welcome....you know...any changes to those shitty lines is welcome....anytime now...

by **Thing** Mon Apr 26, 2010 7:28 pm

It's fine. Stop worrying.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Mon Apr 26, 2010 7:46 pm

posted the fight. gonna do some changes to the other dialogue from the first post.

by **Thing** Mon Apr 26, 2010 7:53 pm

Dray, you might just be the biggest English failure I've ever met... Worser? Really?

by **Dray The Fingerless** Mon Apr 26, 2010 8:05 pm

i did that? sorry, i kinda wrote both those segments in like 15 minutes, so forgive any grammar shit i do

by **Dray The Fingerless** Tue Apr 27, 2010 9:13 pm

so....i did my segment guys. wanna write your final parts? any comments?

by **Aardvark** Wed Apr 28, 2010 7:41 am

Kinda was hoping it would be longer. The fight's good, just short.

I'll post my final segment in a few days - a week, depends on how quickly it comes to me. Essentially my segment will close out the fighting on the planet, but won't really finish the characters up in case Pto or Ara wanna post something. After that Xzav will coordinate with me for the final portion of CoaJ.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Wed Apr 28, 2010 11:17 am

well by now, i think detailed fight scenes have become a bit saturated with details, so i tried to put in enough, but not too much.

by **Aardvark** Wed Apr 28, 2010 11:20 am

It wasn't the details, we all know that's my Schick. It just seemed... short. No other way for me to describe it really.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Wed Apr 28, 2010 11:22 am

lol i understand. i could add more stuff that i still have in my head, but it seems enough for now.

by **Aardvark** Wed Apr 28, 2010 11:48 am

A lot of my segments will be short individually when I post too, so I guess I don't really have any right to complain about short.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Wed Apr 28, 2010 11:54 am

yeah, you see those two posts i did are supposed to be one big one.

by **Aardvark** Wed Apr 28, 2010 12:12 pm

I know, and the first was a good length for pre-fight, the problem is with the second half. It feels like you get cheated out of some of the details they were talking about.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Wed Apr 28, 2010 12:20 pm

Coaj Coordination Thread - Page 35 FAGGOT_ENTERPRISE

FINE, ILL RE WRITE IT LATER.

by **Aardvark** Wed Apr 28, 2010 12:36 pm

You were the one that wanted comments. Like I said you have a fine fight, but none of the dialog in the second part makes sense, we don't have enough back-story.

by **Ptolemy** Wed Apr 28, 2010 2:00 pm

I will have a piece in the next day or so. i am writing for both this week and a paper for school...

I know no excuse Smile

by **Aardvark** Wed Apr 28, 2010 2:14 pm

Umm what part because I may have already written it....

by **Aardvark** Wed Apr 28, 2010 3:02 pm

Double post.

Aardvark wrote:I'll post my final segment in a few days - a week, depends on how quickly it comes to me.

So uh yeah, scratch that, posted.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Wed Apr 28, 2010 5:27 pm

i fixed my post aard, go read. some mroe physical fighting too, man on man.

btw, WTF IS WITH THE DEUS EX MACHINAAAAASS AND YOU? i go thru all that trouble, and he still has BRACELETS?

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