Re: DoaJ Coordination thread

by **Dray The Fingerless** Thu Jul 14, 2011 7:42 pm

you know, air support doesnt work if youre underground aard.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Thu Jul 14, 2011 7:43 pm

i would also like to note that both me and red use blaster(s).

by **Red-X** Thu Jul 14, 2011 8:59 pm

Aardvark wrote:I kinda figured Red would pick up and pull something out of his ass to make the other stuff exciting.

I'll come up with something now and start writting

But, do i have permission to use dusk and daedalus? I'll only use them from red's perspective like ive been doing this whole time.

Have a couple of neat ideas to mess with

by **Aardvark** Thu Jul 14, 2011 9:28 pm

Yeah sure, a PoV is fine as multiple opinions of any leader or conspiracy will form over time. Gives a bit of depth to a story.

by **Red-X** Tue Jul 19, 2011 3:29 pm

almost done

by **Red-X** Tue Aug 02, 2011 5:37 am

finally posted >___<

oh, and no Thing isnt dead if your wondering. I did have more to write, but i decided to end it there

by **Aardvark** Tue Aug 02, 2011 8:43 am

OK, I can work with the reveal, luckily it's still vague enough to suite my purposes. For the purpose of the PoV of the heroes Daedalus is that ship, but the final surprise at the end is going to be a final surprise. I like the twist with Sarus and Ara being captured, but I honestly don't know if I should write an exposition of it because it's kind of nice to have that kind of step up and I honestly couldn't make a scenario better than what people would imagine on their own. I'm just not sure how much of a middle finger it is to lead up to it and then not do anything. So gimme your thoughts should I expound on it or just switch to afterwards?

There is one thing I would like changed. I'd like the 3 lightsabers found ot be charred or damaged in some way beyond repair and I want Ara's lightsaber crystal to be missing from his hilt.

by **Red-X** Tue Aug 02, 2011 4:22 pm

Aardvark wrote:OK, I can work with the reveal, luckily it's still vague enough to suite my purposes. For the purpose of the PoV of the heroes Daedalus is that ship, but the final surprise at the end is going to be a final surprise. I like the twist with Sarus and Ara being captured, but I honestly don't know if I should write an exposition of it because it's kind of nice to have that kind of step up and I honestly couldn't make a scenario better than what people would imagine on their own. I'm just not sure how much of a middle finger it is to lead up to it and then not do anything. So gimme your thoughts should I expound on it or just switch to afterwards?

There is one thing I would like changed. I'd like the 3 lightsabers found ot be charred or damaged in some way beyond repair and I want Ara's lightsaber crystal to be missing from his hilt.

Since i didnt describe the condition of their lightsabers, i dont mind. I was thinking, maybe the daedalus could have a batch of prisoner's, and Ara and Sarus could lead an escape. But the plan of an escape was something Dusk was expecting and twist could be formed out of that? I did try to keep the ship vague since it was your thing and wanted you to fill out the more specific details. Damn, a whole chapter can be written on the hell thats going on inside of the Daedaulus. Maybe even a few sections on it

Oh shit, aard, you should have aragorn in the Embrace of Pain! or both of them

by **Aardvark** Tue Aug 02, 2011 6:50 pm

I have a plan for the escape, but it will throw us into the final battle scenario so I also need input on if you guys think the characters are ready. As for the ship, it'll be very much like the super-weapon from the end of CoaJ, but mobile. I'll make up the details in the next post.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Tue Aug 02, 2011 6:59 pm

thats was marvellously done.

by **Ptolemy** Tue Aug 02, 2011 8:25 pm

well i am not sure the story has been developed enough to fall into the FINAL battle. there is so much more that could be done, unless you are in a hurry to end it...

And very well written Red.

by **Red-X** Wed Aug 03, 2011 10:59 pm

^ i agree. Han, luke and ben didnt destroy the death star the moment they were brought on board; it took awhile. and look how long the republic took to take down the lusankya.

and im sure it went the same with the other super weapons through out the years

live to fight another day....as long as there's casualties. But i still like the embrace of pain idea >_>'

by **Aardvark** Wed Aug 03, 2011 11:31 pm

OK well I can write some stuff up but the best way to continue playing Dawn's character requires both Ara and Sarus remain prisoners until right before the final battle. So I'll be dipping a lot more into other characters on the outside most likely the Ronin and an occasional bit with Red to deal with the here and now.

by **Red-X** Wed Aug 10, 2011 7:08 pm

Something just came to mind. You could have the interior of Daedalus mirror the Lusankya. Kinda aragorn and sarus forced into mess corran had to deal with. The upside down thing. The large prison held within, stuff

by **Aardvark** Thu Aug 11, 2011 2:12 am

No, I've got an idea but I've got a lot of shit on my plate right now so it may take some time.

by **Ptolemy** Fri Aug 26, 2011 3:53 pm

BUMP**

by **Aardvark** Sat Aug 27, 2011 1:58 am

Yeah I know, I've got the entire scenario in my head but I'm cramming to meet a deadline and don't have time to sit and write it out. I can explain the segment to someone else if they'd like to fill in the details otherwise this won't be out until September 7th at earliest.

by **Red-X** Sat Aug 27, 2011 3:19 am

I might be able to make something of it

by **Aardvark** Sat Aug 27, 2011 3:25 am

Lemme know if you decide to take it on and I'll PM you the rough outline of events.

by **Dray The Fingerless** Sat Sep 03, 2011 4:03 pm

im waiting for aards segway to write in after it. so next segment after this one will be mine.

by **Red-X** Sat Sep 03, 2011 6:27 pm

^ im writting aards thing, its gonna be two parts

by **Red-X** Wed Sep 07, 2011 7:23 pm

finished with the first part, will type later today if not much homework

by **Red-X** Sun Sep 11, 2011 3:56 am

posted

Aard, I altered a bit of the ending to the draft you gave me. I probably should of asked, but I, uh, gave Dusk a meditation sphere. And I'm still continuing to write the second part :o

by **Dray The Fingerless** Sun Sep 11, 2011 1:58 pm

ill write next. have some thing with ptolemy. also need to setup things for a final confrontation. seems yavin is gonna be it. but i need thing there too. pronto. so ill write sth with him too.

by **Aardvark** Mon Sep 12, 2011 1:47 am

Good segment Red, the meditation sphere is fine.

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